I had been having a lot of trouble naming my characters.
Each participating editor will approach a submission in a unique way, and speaks only for him or herself. It takes courage to submit work for feedback, especially in this public forum. This writing is really tight as is.
The rose bush, which blankets the pergola, has been dropping petals all evening. They litter the white embroidered tablecloth, and form drifts around the half-dozen empty wine bottles. When they fall into the flickering votive candles, they sizzle and send plumes of black, acrid smoke into the dark night.
Maggie holds her palmfull of petals toward her sister and raises her eyebrows. When they fall into the flickering votive candles they sizzle and send a plume of black, acrid smoke into the dark night.
Maggie smiles, focusing on the task. Because you needed something pretty. But a babysitter once told them that while Justine was pretty, Maggie was beautiful, a statement Maggie took as a universal truth. She assumed Justine took it that way as well. Can you give the reader some idea how Justine, a grown woman, feels about having her sister arrange a petal crown on her head?
I love the imagery.
If we scratch the surface of this family, all is not so rosy! Lizzy grudgingly told them about a bike ride she did from Portland to San Francisco. I was a little jostled by the change in POV in this excerpt.
For example, did Maggie try not to roll her eyes when Justine bragged about her kids? Maggie shakes her head.66+1 sentence examples: 1. She consoled herself with the thought that the acrid smoke would serve to keep flies out of the room. 2. The air is stale and acrid, and a cluster of black flies hovers over the bed.
Acrid in a sentence up(0) down(0) Write, my bubble tea has been already seen bottom, throat inside. Arid Sentence Examples. She glanced around at the arid camp, taking in the dusty tents and scraggly cacti..
The reason for the arid climate differs in different sections. Its waters are lost in the arid stony plateau of the Sorl.
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This gem from is a western that I had never seen before. I am amazed that I never did. In a nutshell, we have a cattle baron and his 4 sons and the 4th son is with a native American woman and very obviously Dad's favorite. Article by Jeanne Englert. Ute Language – August – Colorado Central Magazine.
Editor’s Note: As this article will explain, the Southern Ute language, as currently written, employs many letters that are not in the standard computer character set.